Tuesday, February 17, 2015

Genevieve take a deep breath

Look at those small colourful fish I bubbled .Suddenly I saw a blob of very small fish swimming very slow fast past me then I saw a mid size shark swimming along the deep cold smelly yucky sand.I could also see a ginormous green turtle swimming very slow like a snail and also I could smell the  salty green sea weed. I saw a huge sting ray. I think that was cool the water made a splash. I could also feel the freezing cold water and I felt amazing inside me.

4 comments:

  1. Great wow words smelly yucky sand William

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  2. tejal- wow I love your strong wow words freezing,Amazing, yucky,splash,

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  3. Super writing Genevieve! I really like the way you described the turtle as "ginormous". I also like the way you used your senses to describe to the reader what it was like in the ocean.

    Keep up the super writing Genevieve! I love reading your writing.

    Miss Collins

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  4. Super writing Genevieve! You've got a good hook and I particularly like the way you "bubbled"! You've written a really good moment in time by talking about all your senses. Keep it up!
    Mr Fry

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