one upon a time there was little Chinese baby. He was 8 months old. his family was poor and he had to bath himself. one day when he was having a bath the door was wide open and a boa constrictor crept through the door. I crept towards the bath then it stuck its fangs into the babies head and the bath went red the snake grabbed the baby and took it out the door.
THE END
Poor wee boy having to bath himself.
ReplyDeleteI will finish typing this up for you on Monday.
Star - I like how you have used an interesting moving word "crept".
HI Joride
ReplyDeleteThat sounds really dangerous with that wee boy having to bath himself. When you used the words....boa constrictor "crept" through the door....it really described for me that the wee boy did not know it was coming .... dah dah dah dahhhhh!!
Tip from Mum....Using the describing words, like you are, really helps the reader, "me" to understand and see in my mind what is happening. Great work Jordie.
Love Mum