Monday, March 23, 2015

William -hawk


Woosh, air raced past my scruffy face and I could see dinner a squirrel. It's show time to get that tiny squirrel I thought In my head as I was standing still in a gigantic green tree. "Ar ar," I opened my ugly wings and swooped down. I missed him I kept swooping and turning until the squirrel went in its nest. I was frustrated. The only way to get him is by breaking into his nest I thought. Here it goes donk my face hit the nest. Clonk, the squirrel hit the hard ground. I saw that tiny squirrel's legs moving like a piston. It was amazing but I still need yummy dinner "ah ha it looks like I have him, noooo he is in his hide out, dang it". I am so disappointed I thought in my sore head. "I'll get you one day....

6 comments:

  1. What a disappointing day hunting!
    I really like the ending as it made me want to read more!!!
    Great simile "like a piston" that painted a strong picture in my head.

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  2. Oh no you didn't get a feed !!!!! I like how u described how u felt . I also like that it was interesting and hooked me in !!! By Jackson

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  3. I liked that you did Woosh for the tittle. Lucas

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  4. What,you did not get the squirrel, that not good. But I like like your wow words like gigantic, amazing, yummy,donk and hard

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  5. I like how you really show us what the hawk is feeling and how much he wants his dinner! You have used some great 'wow' words like frustrated, gigantic and clonk which had interest to your story.

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