Wednesday, March 4, 2015

Jackson see saw experience

                                                   
Ouch, this hurts I thought. I told William he could stop now but he said no. I could see the blue and flat ocean, the soft green grass and the grassy soccer field. I could smell the fresh grass and the fresh air. I felt sick like I was on a sinking boat. I wanted to puke ( not to get out of school! ) After the see saw I went over to the hill and rolled down them. I did it because I knew a fast way to roll. After rolling down I felt  dizzy and it looked blurry. I was rolling like a bucket of lava.


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  2. I am pleased you weren't trying to get out of school! You rolled so fast down the hill.
    Great use of alliteration "green grass" and nice use of a simile at the end.
    This painted a picture in my head.

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    1. I hope you enjoyed your sea saw.... I can understand why you would describe it as if you were on the sea "like a sinking boat" and how you wrote about the green grass I imagined it like waves on the sea. Good use of similies, and clear ideas.My favourite sentance was the bit about the lave right at the end

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