Monday, March 2, 2015

Tejal take a breath

"This is so amazing" I shouted.There are lots and lots of fish coming from school.There are turtles here too.I could do swimming , kicking , flicking, zooming and breathing.I could feel that I was going so deep that I could see the sharks catching the fish. It was a big one. I could feel the  strong waves coming towards me.And I could feel inside my heart pumping fast and I was happy too...that I came under water. I was thinking those fish were  cool and they were big like a ginormous whale. The water was getting cold and I was getting cold too. I came out of the water but first I said  bye to the creatures then came out. It was a great adventure for me. The End. By Tejal

4 comments:

  1. You involved a lot of wow words Jackson

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  2. Great writing and wow words Zooming. William

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  3. Great writing Tejal. You have really painted a picture in my mind about what it was like under the ocean. I really liked how you said you could feel the strong waves coming towards you.

    Keep up the great writing.

    Miss Collins :)

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  4. I love the Wow word ginormous! Good work, Tejal!

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