Sunday, May 12, 2013

Christiaan - The day I died

Crash!!!  As I was the first to hit the ground then I felt something push me again onto  the ground.  Suddenly a mountain of my family was on top of me.  Then I saw I saw some hands coming towards me then I was lifted up into the air.   My family was crying out for me.  Then crunch.


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4 comments:

  1. Mrs CarrMay 13, 2013 at 6:42 PM

    Star - I liked the word you used "crunch" Zac

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  2. Mrs CarrMay 13, 2013 at 6:43 PM

    wish - I would like you to use different words rather than "then"

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  3. GBSparentMay 19, 2013 at 3:42 PM

    Seeing hands coming towards you must have been terrifying!

    Great piece of writing a moment in time.

    Mrs Carr

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  4. childrenMay 22, 2013 at 6:56 PM

    och but cool

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