SNOW FALL
''Wow, it's snowing''as I looked out the window.Me and Ruby wanted to play in it right away.So we raced down stairs.We told mum.''Can we please go in the snow mum?'' Ruby said. ''Yes,dress up warm''. We ran to the front door.And I chose a warm jacket and gumboots then I put on warm pants. We chased the the other door .A freezing cold snow flake landed on my nose.A few minutes later we had an awesome snow ball fight.Like an hour later I tripped up on Ruby's snow fort.
THE END.

I LIKE YOUR HOOK I REALLY ENJOYED YOUR STORY
ReplyDeleteCOULD YOU ADD A BIT MORE TO YOUR ENDING WHEN YOU STANDED ON RUBYS SNOW FORT
put more detall about the snow ball on your nose
ReplyDeleteput more detall about the snow ball on your nose
ReplyDeleteput more detall about the snow ball on your nose
ReplyDeletepoor cat
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WHAT COULERS CAN SNOW BE?
ReplyDeletedon't eat yellow snow
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ReplyDeleteStella love the way you described what you did with Ruby in the snow, snow fights are so much fun. The photo looks like our cat Rosie but she didn't like the snow.
Hi Stella,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you described the snowflake that landed on your nose...I bet it was freezing cold!