Sunday, May 12, 2013

Zac - The day I died

I was in the cardboard all alone.  Crash, bang.  The cardboard doors flew open.  Weeeee  I got lifted into the air.   Nerrr splat.  I landed face first.  All I could see was plate.  Arrrr a monster.  I could feel his warm furry paw clamped on me.  My last word was "stupid boy.  Put me down."  Unfortunately my head was in a cave.  I had been swallowed.


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  1. childrenMay 13, 2013 at 9:54 PM

    Star - great use of words that are sounds (onomatopoeia)

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  2. GBSparentMay 19, 2013 at 3:41 PM

    It must have been scary feeling a furry paw clamped on you.

    Mrs Carr

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  3. childrenMay 22, 2013 at 6:58 PM

    I like your start MICHAEL

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  4. childrenMay 22, 2013 at 7:01 PM

    i liked how you put in crash bang
    stella

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